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2015年11月07日雅思大作文范文（升級(jí)版）

The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?　　Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.　　Write at least 250 words.　　話題分析　　這個(gè)題看著不難，但其實(shí)不然。各位在發(fā)散的時(shí)候能想出不是那么籠統(tǒng)(over-generalised)的論點(diǎn)嗎?在學(xué)術(shù)寫作中，最忌諱的莫過于通篇看起來冠冕堂皇但又禁不起細(xì)細(xì)品位推敲的觀點(diǎn)。該題應(yīng)該緊扣“團(tuán)隊(duì)運(yùn)動(dòng)是不是最好的孩子學(xué)習(xí)合作的方式”，而不應(yīng)該花大筆墨在“有哪些可以教會(huì)孩子合作的方式”上并進(jìn)行論證，當(dāng)然，第二點(diǎn)是可以作為例子來引證第一點(diǎn)的，但要分清主次。這次的題目要論證的是團(tuán)隊(duì)運(yùn)動(dòng)是否是最佳教會(huì)孩子合作的方法，由上次的題目分析訓(xùn)練(見前一條微博)可以得知，題目的第一句話本身就是一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)，可以直接就該觀點(diǎn)展開討論?！　∷夭膩碓础　∥視r(shí)常勸導(dǎo)在國內(nèi)考的同學(xué)，既然決定要闖世界，那眼光見識(shí)一定要放寬;既然要去英語言國家學(xué)習(xí)生活，那么就提前適應(yīng)英語言環(huán)境;既然考的是英國人的考試，請(qǐng)?jiān)趯懽魃习堰壿嬎季S也調(diào)整成和他們一個(gè)波段。那么每個(gè)月花幾塊錢買個(gè)VPN上google找找每個(gè)話題下到底有哪些觀點(diǎn)可以參考很難么?說到底還是懶癌(鄙視臉)。本次文章大部分觀點(diǎn)都出自google搜索下主流媒體的報(bào)道?！　》段腗odel answer　　Introduction(自行腦補(bǔ)背景句，闡述個(gè)人傾向)　　Teamwork is essential to a good performance from any sports team, professional or not, and is a great way to teach children certain life lessons, such as cooperating well with others and taking responsibility for actions. Such lessons, from my perspective, are applicable to life outside of sports and can be applied to work or school, such as being able to focus without interruption on a school paper that needs to be written or working with a less-than-pleasant (adj. 相處不太愉快的) colleague on a project.　　Body paragraph 1 (團(tuán)隊(duì)運(yùn)動(dòng)對(duì)合作積極影響1)　　Firstly, teamwork in sports promotes cooperation. Both children and adults can learn how to better cooperate with their teammates (n. 隊(duì)友), even if they are not particularly fond of a teammate or two. Cooperation means putting differences aside for the greater good of the team. Children can learn how the importance of the team supersedes (vt. 接替) the recognition of individual accomplishments (個(gè)人成就的認(rèn)可) - that by working together as a part of a group with a common goal, things can be accomplished that otherwise would be out of the reach of individuals. For example, members of a football team need to cooperate to successfully perform a play, whether on a running play or a passing play. Without everyone involved in the play working together to make the play happen, the other team could wind up with the ball (獲勝).　　Body paragraph 2(團(tuán)隊(duì)運(yùn)動(dòng)對(duì)合作積極影響2)　　Secondly, no sports team is successful without working together to reach a common goal and athletic competition (體育競賽) provides opportunities for children to learn and grow. Some education experts state that organised sports programs can teach children important societal values (社會(huì)價(jià)值觀) that are vital to their growth process. Through team sports especially, children can learn that cooperation and teamwork are necessary to achieve a common goal. Additionally, playing a team sport can help children understand how their actions affect the other team’s players or candidates (n. 選手), which simultaneously (adv. 同時(shí)地) develops their social and communicational skills.　　Body paragraph 3 (團(tuán)隊(duì)運(yùn)動(dòng)不足及替代方法)　　However, some indicate that the nature of sports (運(yùn)動(dòng)的本質(zhì)) – competitiveness – cannot be ignored and this may create some unnecessary injuries for children. Some of today’s child athletes are suffering from pain due to overuse of muscles and joints (n. 關(guān)節(jié)) and/or acute trauma (急性創(chuàng)傷) which used to be seen only in adults. Much of this is from focusing on a single sport which uses repetitive motions (重復(fù)運(yùn)動(dòng)), and from training too intensely (adv. 強(qiáng)烈地) at a young age. Because of this, some studies suggest there are some other activities that cansubstitute for (代替;替換) team sports to help young people learn the importance of cooperating with others, such as group presentations and some classroom games (e.g. human knots and wave stretching).　　Conclusion　　To conclude, although other methods in class can be adopted to create a co-operative environment for children, learning to cooperate with others towards a common goal in sports is what builds character, friendship and important life skills for children. The friendships built within a team can last a lifetime for some players, and the journey of a team throughout a certain period is often memorable.　　(482 words)　　常識(shí)解析　　wind up with the ball: wind up指“結(jié)束;停止;完成”之意，這里引申為在比賽中獲勝的意思?！　ature: 常用作“自然”，此外還有“本質(zhì);天性”等意思。　　Telling lies is a fault in a boy, an art in a lover, an accomplishment in a bachelor, and second-nature in a married man.　　20151114b　　The consumption of world’s resources (e.g. oil and fresh water) is increasing. What are thecauses? What measures should be taken to solve this problem?　　Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.　　Write at least 250 words.　　話題分析　　這個(gè)題目我也真是B了狗了，哪有問這么寬的，各位去環(huán)境能源等學(xué)科領(lǐng)域，人都是分能源消耗、土地消耗、食品消耗等各個(gè)子話題去討論的好!嗎!但是對(duì)于各位來說，其實(shí)也有好處，因?yàn)椴还茉趺窗l(fā)散論點(diǎn)都不會(huì)太跑題。只是要注意一點(diǎn)，這次考的是causes + solutions (成因 + 解決方式)，千萬別寫成什么問題之類的。同時(shí)請(qǐng)注意，在這類文章中，解決方式要么能和前面的問題一一對(duì)應(yīng)，要么能解決前面所有的問題，否則會(huì)因段落之間沒有顯著聯(lián)系而失分?！　∷夭膩碓础　「鱾€(gè)環(huán)境能源網(wǎng)站。但是我只用到了人口激增和科技發(fā)展這兩個(gè)因素進(jìn)行論證，末尾附一個(gè)鏈接，主要討論為“能源枯竭與過度使用 (Resource Depletion and Overuse )” ，同時(shí)也可作為該題論點(diǎn)，請(qǐng)大家有時(shí)間看看。同時(shí)在環(huán)境能源話題下，各位應(yīng)該多累積詞匯和相應(yīng)表達(dá)?！　》段腗odel answer　　Introduction (背景句加文章寫作目的)　　Global resource consumption equals global resource extraction (全球資源開采): the world economy uses around 60 billion tonnes of resources each year to produce the goods and services which humans consume. This number is still increasing as the years go on. In this essay, I will first analyse some causes including population size and technology development and then suggest some possible solutions.　　Body paragraph 1 (闡述兩個(gè)成因)　　First, at least part of the rise in global consumption is the result of population growth and the fact that natural resources are being used up at a more rapid rate than in the past. It is predicted that world population will increase 41 percent by 2050 to 8.9 billion people, which means that there will be more pressure on all types of resources that the world relies on for survival. Second, advances in technology are of great importance for countries to develop manufacturing and service sectors, as well as high levels of transport and movement of goods. This leads to higher demand for global resources. Additionally, the accelerating industrialisation process in developing countries also produces a huge demand for resources.　　Body paragraph 2 (提出兩個(gè)解決方法)　　Some empirical and theoretical (實(shí)證和理論的) recommendations can be taken into consideration. First, effective population control measures are advisable in this case. For one, strict legal steps should be taken to abolish (vt. 廢除) child marriage and labour; steps should also be taken to help educate the populace (n.民眾), specifically in family planning. Additionally, education, especially the education of women, can work wonders (產(chǎn)生奇妙作用) in controlling population. An educated couple can readily understand the benefits of a small family. Second, the environmental protection concept should be promoted among both manufacturers and customers, and technologies can help this. For example, many items such as light bulbs and washing machines are now being designed to be more energy efficient thus reducing the demand for energy.　　Conclusion　　To conclude, the population explosion and rapid technological progress are two main causes of increasing resource consumption. Based on this, proper writing and enforcement of laws, innovated and environmental technological design, and sustainable development are three key solutions.　　(330 words)